It rains all day, on and off, gentle pattering against the window, not loud enough to drown our conversation, but strong enough to make us pause and look outwards, at the garden dissolving like a painting under water, colours blending and merging. At first the thirsty ground drinks it up, then eventually sickens of it, turns away, lets the water run down the path and out to the lane. Each rose holds a million tiny mirrors, the cranesbill holds its face up to be washed clean. Each blade of grass is jeweled with crystals, each leaf is gem studded. I hold a fortune in my hand, then let it fall. We stand in silence, all words lost, showered away.
Each drop a secret
Summer rain whispers into
The flower’s cool heart
A Haibun – it’s Monday atDVerse and we are asked to write a haibun on the subject of rain. We’ve had quite a lot of that this last week or so – I consider myself an expert! – in rain, if not haibuns!
Hmm.. Wow..! this reminds me of
a very difficult rain mounTain way..
as for awhile all sounds
for me were so loud
thaT a cricket SonG
IS A freight train
then and the
drops of rain
are Chinese
Water torture
from Jupiter Banging
on mY Roof.. anyWay.. i could
not separate the rain from i.. then..
except for ear plugs for escape.. ugh..
Some Autism..
LiterAlly IS A
A RainMan challenge..:)
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This is truly wondrous Sarah,the way you have used the sounds and the sense of gathering riches… the way you describing the soil releasing the water, fattened with moist.. a perfect haibun
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So beautiful – you have such an elegant way of writing.
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Thank you so much.
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This is so beautiful. I love the cranesbill holding up its face to be cleaned. The way you look for riches in the rain. I love the though of the rain whispering into the flower’s cool heart.
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Thank you. I do appreciate your comments, and your lovely prompt.
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Thank you. I love the trhoughts of those flower faces so much.
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I love your water colors in the garden through the rain-streaked window. 🙂 Beautiful haibun. Seems pretty expert to me.
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Thank you! But I have sat watching the rain much more than I’ve ever written haibuns!
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Time is not always the measure of expertness or excellence. 😉
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Your sensory details are absolutely delicious, stunning. I was going to highlight one or two but would have ended up with the whole haibun. Your ability to notice nature reminds me of Mary Oliver and that’s about the highest compliment I can give.
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I love the sound of rain and the holding that raindrop, a fortune in one’s hand. This part is exquisite:
at the garden dissolving like a painting under water, colours blending and merging.
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This was such a delight Sarah. Very enjoyable.
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In awe of this line:
“Each rose holds a million tiny mirrors”
So gorgeous.
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Beautiful writing! And the haiku is excellent! 🙂
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I hold a fortune in my hand, then let it fall… loved that!
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A stunning image: ‘dissolving like a painting under water’ and ‘Each rose holds a million tiny mirrors, the cranesbill holds its face up to be washed clean.’
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In a word, this is “exquisite.” What a beautiful post!
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Thank you, really appreciate your kind comments.
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Sarah love how the rain made you stop and look – all that marvellous imagery the reader can see it too
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Oh, thank you. Might as well try and enjoy the rain…
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Again I turn to the haiku to see how completely your thoughts flow. Rest assured, exceptionally! Nice, Sarah!
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Thank you, Walter, I do appreciate your careful reading and your kind words.
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Gorgeous. You make rain sound so attractive.
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Perfection, and very much expect!
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We had these drenching rains all winter…more like summer really. I love how you describe the earth turning away after it’s saturated with too much and just lets the rain flow where it will. The images of the gems covering all that the rain touches are beautiful.
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What a beautiful summer rain and haiku!
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I have a big smile on my face after the experience your haibun created for us!
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Lovely! I like the way that you decorated the plants and flowers with rain and your description of the scene as a painting under water is stunning. Loved this.
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Wonderful details, reminding me of when I too have seen such rains.
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