And as I am a glutton for punishment, here is my second rondelet for Jane Dougherty’s poetry challenge #37. The rhythm is a tricky one, but I think we’re getting there.
Journey makers
We’ve travelled far,
You and I, through the great wide world,
We’ve travelled far,
Two backpacks, a tent, a guitar,
And we’ve watched the sunrise unfurl
Roads of diamonds, oceans of pearls –
We’ve travelled far.
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Gorgeous! The repeated line really works well here. I love the line: We’ve watched the sunrise unfurl roads of diamonds, oceans of pearls.
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Thank you. Yes, I think I got it a bit better second time around!
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There’s a more magical element in the second poem that appeals to me.
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I’ve spent years feeling a bit embarrassed by my magical, fantasy side, but I’m starting to think it works…
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It’s the only thing that works for me—it’s called escapism, and Jesus do we need it!
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Yes, those two lines are great.
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There’s something about pearls. You can chuck them into any dull sentence and it’s transformed into poetry 🙂
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Oi!
You’re probably right, actually…😊
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I didn’t mean by that that your phrase minus pearls would have been dull. But I think you know that 🙂
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I also prefer this poem. The first one was fine, but I agree that there is a magical quality to this one–and the road of diamonds, oceans of pearls line is splendid.
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Thank you. I prefer it, too. I wanted to capture some of that treasure that seems to be lying in the bottom of the boat. I’m guessing that’s where all those lady pirates came from…
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🙂
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I like this one very much…it tells a story. Brilliant! 🙂
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Thank you x
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