Stars, night, water – for Jane Dougherty

The moon reaches down and she kisses the face of the water,
And stars shimmer clear in the indigo depths of the lake.
My heart is an owl that’s as silent as midnight in winter,
I am waiting to wrap you in moonlight and starlight and dark

My heart’s a wild hare that runs swift down the lane in the moonlight,
And I long for the touch of your eyes and the kiss of your skin.
And the sky is a tent that is hung round with velvet and diamonds,
And the meadow is softer than pillows and sweeter than sin.

The fox walks the night in a whisper of hunter and hunted,
The moths fly like ghosts of their sisters who dance in the sun
The night holds the sound of your steps as you walk down the garden,
I am waiting, my heart is a flame that is burning within.


This was written for Jane Dougherty’s poetry challenge. She’s looking for metre. These seem like terribly long lines to me, but when I read them out loud I can definitely hear the rhythm there, which is what I was after. 

13 thoughts on “Stars, night, water – for Jane Dougherty

  1. I’m currently reading Swinburne and the way you mix the iamb and the anapest in one line reminds me of his poetry=) It’s a beautiful poem, Sarah, and the rhythm is enchanting!


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  3. I liked this the first time I read it – the sound and rhythm of it. But I am so ignorant about the metrical names and feet or whatever, that I cannot make any decent comment. In fact, I had to look up the meaning of the terms Fantasy Raconteur left in the first comment. 🙂


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