I don’t know quite how this became our “thing”. We took up the challenge – encouraging each other, competing a little bit – kept up monthly swims all summer, all winter, and all summer again. Now it’s autumn, and we’re still at it. There have been high winds this week, and the surf is big. The clouds are low, and there’s so much spray it’s hard to know where the air ends and the sea begins. It’s a monochrome day as we walk in together, feeling the cold – “It’s not so bad!” – rising over ankles, calves, knees, thighs, hips – and then the final dive under a rolling wave, and the triumphant resurfacing.
Grey clouds, grey sea –
petrel hanging above water –
plunging into life
Bjorn is tending bar at dVerse tonight. He wants a watery haibun, with a seasonal haiku. I want a hot whiskey after that.
What a wonderful challenge… for me it’s bicycling all through winter… I don’t think I could ever go into the water in winter… (except maybe if I had a hot sauna close by)… love how you have included the petrel into your haiku
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I don’t think it gets quite so cold here as it does with you. January, February and March were the worst months, but it really makes you feel alive!
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January and February would require you to open up a hole in the ice 🙂
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Yeah, I’m not sure I’d go that far…
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Brrrriliantly written, that lay line of the haiku! Put a touch of honey in that hot whiskey.
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Definitely. And some cloves…
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Ooo. It all sounds good, except the cold swim. I’ll sit on the beach and mind the hot drinks.
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*last line. (Stoopid phone!)
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I love your write!! Your prose tells it just right!
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Beautiful haiku, terrifying prose!
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beautiful, and brave…
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Not having much experience being in water, I can imagine that resurfacing after diving into a wave would make me feel triumphant.
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I used to love swimming but haven’t been for a long time due to cramps. Maybe if I had someone to go with. But that’s a fantastic challenge. I know someone who does New year and moonlight swims in Cromer.
Wonderful haiku – with a petrel!
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Brrr – you are brave! I don’t think I would enter the sea this time of year.
I think your haiku is brilliant.
Anna :o]
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I admire you for continuing that challenge, most specially through winter ~ Very brave of you, and love that triumphant resurfacing ~ Cheers!
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I perfectly went swimming along as I read this. Not that I would swim in the ocean… knowing the kinds of things that live there… but I can appreciate the exhilaration one must feel. Love the haiku!
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That is a wonderful Haibun. The narrative is so present and connects with you. I love the petrel and the diving in to life. Well done.
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very nice – and congrats for sticking at the swimming. The cold (and the conversation around it), the air, the water and the bird above hang together beautifully in this piece.
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The way you describe the challenge – it makes me want to join you. Love the haiku!
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This sounds amazing. Your bravery rewards you with great fodder for poetry!
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I admire you brave souls here in the cold briney ocean. I have done a bit of wild swimming but never regularly. Love the Haiku.
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It’s honestly not that bad once you’re in…mostly!
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Had to look up Petrel — then loved the last line — oh, and your cold swim custom!
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Hey Sarah, given that you like plain poetry, maybe consider participating in “Feedback Poetry” — interestingly enough, I see you are already following it — wonder how you found it.
https://feedbackpoetry.wordpress.com/
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Thanks, Sabio. I will wander over there!
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An exquisite extended metaphor! Love the twists and turns!
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Hi, Sarah . . . So what’s the difference between a haibun and a haiku? (If there is one!)
I love the brevity of these little gems.
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Funny you should ask! It is haibun night at dVerse tonight. https://dversepoets.com/2017/11/13/fukuroo-who-who-who-dverse-haibun-monday/
A haibun is a short piece of prose, followed by a haiku. Classically the prose should be true (ish!) and held in the here and now. The haiku should expand on or illuminate an aspect of the prose, so that the two of them work together. I have a love hate relationship with the haiku. If you are going to do it properly, with seasonal words and cutting words and all that malarkey they can seem very daunting.
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