45 thoughts on “Renga challenge for Jilly’s January bricks

  1. I wonder if I want to try my hand at a renga. Never done it before. From reading the rengas by Jilly and Qbit it’s a 10 couplet effort, five each by two participants, done in the comment section with discussion encouraged? Following is my response.

    the day broke early, light scattering, looking
    for refuge from the delusions of the night

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    • This is what I have so far:

      Come and stand beside me at the window,
      the world out there is waiting for us.
      The day broke early, light scattering, looking
      for refuge from the delusions of the night –
      all those dreams shattered, now a thousand shards,
      melting and fading in the sunlight. I still reach for them,
      a sudden refraction bewilders the senses
      while day’s mundane routine veils a private loss,
      as if the rhythm of this ordinary day
      contains some charm to hold our lives suspended

      I make that 5 couplets, so we are half way through.

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  2. I just noticed the couplet reading:
    as if the rhythm of this ordinary day
    contains some power to hold our lives suspended

    in the next comment, putting the five couplets together the last line has charm instead of power. Up to you which version you want to stand – I like the ‘charm’ too.

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      • I enjoyed this tremendously! It went quite quickly – case of great minds and all that … ๐Ÿ™‚ I’m off to get a good night’s sleep. Will catch up with the result tomorrow. Thanks for putting this out there!

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