Once upon a – poem for dVerse

Once upon a diamond night
Music tumbled from these halls,
Stars hung like candles, clear and bright

Hands reach out and feet take flight,
Lovers join within these walls,
Once upon a diamond night

Her face is dazzling to his sight,
And as he gazes, he recalls
Stars hung like candles, clear and bright.

Mirrors reflect the dancing lights,
The to and fro that never palls,
Once upon a diamond night

She turns to flee as midnight strikes –
On the step her slipper falls,
Stars hang like candles, clear and bright

Now he searches day and night
For one who’ll answer when he calls,
Come dancing through the diamond night,
and stars like candles, clear and bright.

 

With a prompt like that, I couldn’t resist a little fairytale romance, and a villanelle seemed to fit. All our poems must start with “Once upon a…” – Lillian is prompting at dVerse tonight.

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23 thoughts on “Once upon a – poem for dVerse

  1. A fairytale romance indeed! LOVE it! Read it a second time, but aloud. The repetition gives it a very special appeal. Just a wonderful Once Upon a for the prompt! 🙂 Smiling I am.

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  2. yes the vilanelle added to a magical fairy tale feel, I am reminded of a song from a kids cartoon, about a princess who forgot she was a princess except when she danced in a dazzling ballroom. oh you made my heart quiver with excitement when I read this. so enchanting!

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    • Villanelles are one of those repeating forms (doh! – you probably worked that out!) – so the standard form is A1 b A2, a b A1, a b A2, a b A1, ab A2 abA1A2. The trick is to choose fairly flexible A lines, and end words with lots of rhyming options. I have a vague feeling it might be supposed to be in iambic pentameter, but I could well be wrong on that. It’s nice when it works – it’s a bit like doing a crossword or a jigsaw puzzle without a picture to follow…

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  3. delightful and most definitely, the fairy tale romance and chance to loss but love found really works very well with your chosen form. truly makes this all the more magical 🙂

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