The ocean joins us – pantoum by Sarah and Gina

The ocean here is cold, and fierce, and grey,
The waves create an imprint on the sand.
The shore you walk is many miles away,
Ripples connecting our earth end to end.

The waves create an imprint in the sand,
My footprints mark the way that I have come –
Ripples connecting our earth end to end,
One ocean glimmering beneath one sun.

My footprints mark the way that I have come,
The path ahead is long and yet unknown,
One ocean glimmering beneath one sun,
I see other footprints, I know am not alone.

The path ahead is long and yet unknown –
I wait for stars to shine and as I wait
I see other footprints. I know I’m not alone,
Yet I’m afraid to follow, I hesitate –

I wait for stars to shine, and as I wait
The shore you walk is many miles away
Yet I’m afraid to follow, I hesitate
The ocean here is cold, and fierce, and grey

Gina at https://alifelesslivedblog.wordpress.com/ is our host for this month’s dVerse form – the pantoum. In her excellent introduction to the form, she mentioned the Malaysian tradition of creating shared pantoums at weddings. I was intrigued, and invited her to join me in creating a shared pantoum – and here is the finished piece. We provided alternate rhyming couplets. I’m really pleased with how it worked out, and I think I learned a lot about the writing technique for pantoums while doing it. Thank you for sharing this with me, Gina – it was a great experience! I recommend it.

I got to choose the subject (and the title!). Gina’s blog has a picture of a beach, and I live near the ocean too. I guess the same water has rolled up on my shore in Devon, England, and Gina’s shore in Malaysia.

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18 thoughts on “The ocean joins us – pantoum by Sarah and Gina

  1. Such a lovely idea to write this pantoum together–and the thought that Sarah’s cold, grey ocean joins Gina’s warm one–“One ocean glimmering beneath one sun,” made me happy. (Mine in NJ is in-between.) 🙂

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  2. Reblogged this on Singledust and commented:
    So Sarah had a brilliant idea and we wrote a pantoum together! If you are keen to write one and participate, look for the link in the post here and our process on Sarah’s blog. Thank you Sarah I really enjoyed creating this with you and have deeper appreciation of the pantoum!

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  3. What a beautiful poem you two have created with such deeper meaning that we’re all connected and walk together among the shores that are separated, by the vast waters of our lands, but we’re not alone and our hearts connect others that walk amongst us, that have gone before us, and those to come after us.😊❤️

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  4. This is a beautiful collaborative work- Bravo!. I admire the connectedness of the verses specially:

    Ripples connecting our earth end to end,
    One ocean glimmering beneath one sun.

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