I scrawl my words on every blade of grass,
scribble them in the sand, twig scratch them
on the winter clouds,
and the line the plough makes
is the line of my words
is the line the plough makes,
and birdsong creeps in, and the sound
the wind makes
and the curve of the deep lane
and the rhythm of the sea
as it sweeps in and out, and the
skittering of pebbles
and the line the waves make
is the line of my words
is the line the waves make
and each verse is a green field,
and each verse is a tree
and each verse is a sea-smoothed stone
and I write an orchard,
a daisy, a pool formed
in the ruts in the lane,
mud holding water:
water holding the sky.
Anmol is hosting at dVerse tonight, and asks us to think about geography. I am deeply influenced by my surroundings – the geography seeps in everywhere, and I think my poetry is infused with a sense of place. It was interesting to focus on that feeling and try to put it into words.
I love the progression here, where it almost feels that at first the landscape shape the words until at the end you become the creator writing the orchard… to go from observer to creator
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Nice last two lines linking mud to sky through water.
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You are the creator of your world/poem is my takeaway. Beautiful!
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Gorgeous. This is the kind of poem I love. The words are simple and they express something profound.
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Sarah — that poem is just wonderful. I loved every plough furrow.
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“Mud holds the water, the water the sky”. So beautifully written.
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I love this! ❤️ Especially: “and each verse is a green field, and each verse is a tree and each verse is a sea-smoothed stone.” So utterly beautiful! 😀
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You had me at /twig scratch them on the winter clouds/. You elevate all of us with your tale\ of co-creation. I like the feel and sound of the refrains and the beautiful boldness of your adventure in language and landscape.
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I love this — the art of writing rooted in place and surroundings make for a beautiful map of inspiration and observation — I read your words as a progenitor of poems that are created from subjects as much as they create them. I loved “the line the plough(/waves) makes” stanzas in particular. 🙂
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This rolls effortlessly specially with repetition of each line and verse, steeped by your surroundings:
and each verse is a green field,
and each verse is a tree
and each verse is a sea-smoothed stone
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It’s hard to believe that poem is a response to a prompt. It reads like a piece that has been polished painstakingly until it’s perfect. And, speaking of reading, it really demands to be read out loud.
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This was beautiful SARAH, and I especially was taken by the last verse, with the sky reflection in the puddle. This is very lyrical!
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All of what everyone above said. This is so beautiful, Sarah. I love the repetition–almost an insistence to be heard.
That last stanza–wow! It just lingers with its truth.
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I had a vision of the world creating itself and the words a mirror. (K)
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This is a beautiful poem, it sings!
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I agree with the comments here, that if this was read aloud it would be just beautiful.
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