I love you as the dry earth loves the rain
and your voice is as sweet as the sound of the rain
you have walked through the desert with me
your footsteps as soft as the gentle rain
you have nurtured me like a young tree
that turns its leaves to the touch of the rain
you have come to me through the darkness
the sound of thunder, the driving rain
you have filled the fruit on my boughs
with sweet juices for those who thirst for rain
you have softened the glare of the sun for me
gentled the heat like cooling rain
you have swept me down to the wide ocean
a river filled with the bounteous rain
you have washed the veil from this princess
and left her naked in the summer rain
So, I have given in to the ghazal and gone for the lushly romantic. Each stanza stands alone, I think, and together they create a flower with many petals. Or something like that. This is for the dVerse Form for All project for June, hosted by Gay. I’m linking up to the dVerse Open Link night, too.
I like the companion’s footsteps in the desert being as soft a gentle rain.
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Beautiful
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Thank you so much.
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I like the lushness. Rain does that. (K)
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I had a glass of wine, and just relaxed into it…
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I like the lushness of this, too, and there’s a gentle rhythm to it like rain, as well. Nicely done, Sarah.
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When I read this, I feel lifted and refreshed.
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So lovely! 🌻
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This is beyond beautiful, Sarah! ❤️
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And you certainly achieved lushly romantic. Lovely poem, Sarah.
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I can feel the tone of romance in each line. Lovely read for the evening.
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Nicely done!
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Wow …what a sensuous poem touching on sensual at the end. It did grab all my nerve endings and it too really sang. Excellent work! Loved it.
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Beautifully done Sarah, I love the gentle rhythm of the rain and the lushness it brings 🙂💖💦
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There’s nothing wrong with giving in to it, Sarah, and I love your lushly romantic flower with many petals and the way the rain trickles through it! It’s so sensual, especially the lines:
‘you have filled the fruit on my boughs
with sweet juices for those who thirst for rain’
and
‘you have washed the veil from this princess
and left her naked in the summer rain’.
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Steps so lush and lightly. The final couplet is gorgeous.
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Well, I’m glad you like it. It’s not my usual thing, but the ghazal made me do it.
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A tricky form, and you’ve done it proud.
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Sounds like the perfect partner to walk through the rain with….and all of life.
I do agree that each line could stand alone beautifully.
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Beautifully romantic!
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This is excellent!. A fine read. Well done Sarah!
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This is an excellent ghazal. true to the form, and for those who wish to read it so could be the religious love instead of a romantic one.
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This makes me think of Omar Khayyam, it has an eastern exoticism. Perhaps because in the west we tend to dismiss the rain as a nuisance. This explores all the sensual aspects of rain.
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So full of hope! Love this Sarah!
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I agree with Björn that this works on both a romantic and mystical level, beautifully done!
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A lush ghazal comparing lover to rain…exquisitely written!
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you have washed the veil from this princess
and left her naked in the summer rain
Poetically drenching…
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Thank you.
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