“I’ll keep you in the keep,” he said,
“I’ll keep you in the keep.”
“The dungeon’s very deep,” he said
“The castle walls are steep,” he said
“You only sit and weep”, he said,
“I’ll keep you in the keep”.
A quadrille for Kim at dVerse. I could have gone on for hours, or at least until I ran out of “-eep” words – but I’m only allowed 44!
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Sarah writes poems 
This is so very sinister….
but I’m sure she grew her hair to be long enough to let her savior in.
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Great.
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Thank you.
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A dark tale indeed Sarah.
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Eep! Some fairy tales are better left to fade away….
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I agree with Bjorn, a sinister quadrille. I hope she has hair like Rapunzel, Sarah,so that she can escape. The repetition of ‘he said’, the rhyme and rhythm remind me of something. At first I thought of Lewis Carroll, but it’s eluding me.
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I like the rhythm of this, and the possibilities a longer poem might have allowed. 🙂
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And yes, I am already imagining Rapunzel’s escape.
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Sleep
Sheep
Creep
Peep… You get the idea…
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These are comforting words. I love the rhyme here.
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This fairy tale has a dark center and a pounding beat. It really works well when read aloud, the rhymes and refrain heighten the drama.
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A dark tale in 44, Sarah! I could feel the tension in every word!
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I love that pictured castle!! Like you, I was reluctant to stop at 44! I enjoyed your journey, tho.
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The frightening nature of this piece is stirring. The photo is breathtaking Sarah!
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I can’t claim credit for the photo – it was a free one that came up in the WordPress media bit! I just thought the poem looked a bit naked on the page. I don’t usually add images, I like people to have pictures in their head.
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Dark and getting darker and creepier with each keep…
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I wonder what this person has done to be sent to the keep to weep. An original piece of writing 🙂
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Fab!
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Like a jump rope song…(keep going) (K)
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Run! Deliciously dark, ominous.
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It could have been worse. Think, if only 21 words were allowed … 😊 That pit “ain’t so bad”. And, what the heck; running out of it, anyway. Ai think, getting lost is just a manoeuvre. That is French, and not at all English. Or, American. Or, Australian, or whatever. And, those Frenchmen are quite peculiar. And, getting it, they know , for example, what to do, aI believe. Since aI am utterly fond of foreigners. And, aI am Norwegian. So, aI think highly even of the English. It has with standards to do … So are they, lissom.
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You always surprise and delight even when scary.
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Nice melodic sound with all that repetition.
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That is one impressive keep.
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