Rooks rooting in the wet soil,
one rook, and another, and another,
all across the field, moving,
not military, no, more like
a mob of mates, meandering
not marching. Rooks roost
in the ash trees at the top
of the long meadow. Rooks rise
whirlwinding into the grey air,
I don’t know why. I never see
what triggers it, I only know
they rise, they circle, they spread out,
not tied together like the starlings,
not in a sharp-carved V
like the wild geese,
but just a rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble
of black wings, feathers splayed.
Bjorn is hosting MTB night at dVerse. He’s looking for assonance, consonance and alliteration. All of those things are hard to avoid, I think, but sometimes it’s good to do something consciously, like concentrating on your forehand.
a mob of mates and other lovely phrases make this such a treat for the senses, words rolling off my tongue in a beautiful symphony
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I love this, Sarah–and I agree with Gina, this is a treat for the senses.
Also, pleased to see your rooks again–this rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble of mates.
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The mob of mates is an apt description….and “rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble…”
I love how you painted the scene….you almost had me looking sky-wards! 🙂
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Nice description: “rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble”
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I’m in awe at your penetrating eye and your curiosity, offering the mystery to us. And these lines “rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble of black wings, feathers splayed” are pure magic.
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I LOVE the rambling, rolling riffraff rabble! It so aptly describes rooks on the move!
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Fabulous 😎 😎
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I love the “rambling, rolling, riffraff rabble”….I always love poems with birds in them.
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Thank you
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You portray the movement of the rooks so well.. the rambling rolling riffraff rabble describes the orderly chaos of the dark mob
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Loved the use of alliteration
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Thank you.
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