These are the things they don’t tell us:
- Where we’re going.
- How long the journey is
- What we’ll do when we get there
They tell us why we’re being sent. We are misfits, troublemakers, boat-rockers. We are not wanted here. We’re not criminals – oh no – and this is not punishment. This is opportunity.
Gossip, of course, is rampant. One group thinks we’re being trained for extreme cold. One groups thinks we’re being fed birth control pills. Pink haired Jaine thinks we’re going to be saving the planet.
Me? I listen. I watch. I notice who gets the best seat, who takes the first potato, who takes the last slice of cake. Who glances at their neighbour. Who laughs too much. Because I don’t know where we’re going, but I do know that when we get there, I’m going to survive. I’m going to thrive.
A 144 word flash fiction for Jade at dVerse. Prosery is a dVerse form – 144 words including a quotation from a poem. Today, the quotation is “These are the things they don’t tell us” and the poem is “Notes on Uvalde” by Girl du Jour. You can read the poem in full in Jade’s dVerse prompt. It’s immensely powerful and very moving.
Sarah, my innards trembled as I read your poem. You speak for so many who have been on journeys towards such an unknown. I know this person will survive where so many others will not…
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This is chilling, Sarah, and I know there are too many throughout history who have had to do this, and no doubt many more to come.
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WOW! GREAT story telling here.. These words “who takes the first potato” make it sound particularly dire and frightening. Truly, this could be a scene for a future sci-fi movie!
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Oh, thanks – I was hoping to sound a bit dystopian – it’s always hard to know if it’s come off.
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it was me I HAD THE LAST PIECE OF CAKE. loved this
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I’ve got my eye on you…
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👍🍰
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Your words resonate with me and inspire me. Your message has been my life-long mantra. The only way to thrive in hell is become someone who runs the place.
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I like this character; he’s got a great voice and spirit!! Enjoyed your take on the prompt! 👏👏
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It’s a scary nightmare that seems oh too real. I enjoyed the sensitivity and pensiveness of the narrator. It allowed us to experience it all, but like the MC form our own opinions. I enjoyed this very much.
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Thank you!
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Oh I like this, Sarah. The visuals were so specific and interesting…giving my imagination lots to play with!
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Mystery swirls around this piece, and the narrator’s voice is strong, and steady. One hopes she does survive. Her energy is geared to, and it is all the more tragic to suppose she might not.
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I’m afraid your potato-grabber will survive. Sod the meek, they have heaven after all.
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I enjoyed this …no doubt the watchers, the thinkers, the helpers, the doers, the folks in tune with their worlds are going to be ok, at least we hope so.
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Poignant! We are always on the way. xx Michael
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This brought chills as I thought of where they might be going. A great take on the prompt.
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Good for you. 🙂
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