Ryokuu – Summer rain haibun

It rains all day, on and off, gentle pattering against the window, not loud enough to drown our conversation, but strong enough to make us pause and look outwards, at the garden dissolving like a painting under water, colours blending and merging. At first the thirsty ground drinks it up, then eventually sickens of it, turns away, lets the water run down the path and out to the lane. Each rose holds a million tiny mirrors, the cranesbill holds its face up to be washed clean. Each blade of grass is jeweled with crystals, each leaf is gem studded. I hold a fortune in my hand, then let it fall. We stand in silence, all words lost, showered away.

Each drop a secret
Summer rain whispers into
The flower’s cool heart

A Haibun – it’s Monday atDVerse and we are asked to write a haibun on the subject of rain. We’ve had quite a lot of that this last week or so – I consider myself an expert! – in rain, if not haibuns!

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29 thoughts on “Ryokuu – Summer rain haibun

  1. Hmm.. Wow..! this reminds me of
    a very difficult rain mounTain way..
    as for awhile all sounds
    for me were so loud
    thaT a cricket SonG
    IS A freight train
    then and the
    drops of rain
    are Chinese
    Water torture
    from Jupiter Banging
    on mY Roof.. anyWay.. i could
    not separate the rain from i.. then..
    except for ear plugs for escape.. ugh..

    Some Autism..
    LiterAlly IS A
    A RainMan challenge..:)

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  2. This is so beautiful. I love the cranesbill holding up its face to be cleaned. The way you look for riches in the rain. I love the though of the rain whispering into the flower’s cool heart.

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  3. Your sensory details are absolutely delicious, stunning. I was going to highlight one or two but would have ended up with the whole haibun. Your ability to notice nature reminds me of Mary Oliver and that’s about the highest compliment I can give.

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  4. I love the sound of rain and the holding that raindrop, a fortune in one’s hand. This part is exquisite:

    at the garden dissolving like a painting under water, colours blending and merging.

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  5. A stunning image: ‘dissolving like a painting under water’ and ‘Each rose holds a million tiny mirrors, the cranesbill holds its face up to be washed clean.’

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  6. We had these drenching rains all winter…more like summer really. I love how you describe the earth turning away after it’s saturated with too much and just lets the rain flow where it will. The images of the gems covering all that the rain touches are beautiful.

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  7. Lovely! I like the way that you decorated the plants and flowers with rain and your description of the scene as a painting under water is stunning. Loved this.

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