I be
I be
I be
and then I don’t be
I be dance
I be rain
I be flow
and then I don’t be
I gone
I gone again
I pain
I sorrow
I take the white road and I be walker I be rider I be traveller
I be thirst
I be hunger
I be want
I be anger I be silence
I be
I be
I be
and then I don’t be
Ah, the exquisite pain of tonight’s dVerse prompt, where Paul is making us give grammar for the evening. Made worse for me by the fact that I’m having an L M Montgomery binge, and she has the bad habit of using poor grammar for comic effect. You are a cruel man, Mr Scribbles…
Well cruel I may be but look what you produced.This is a piece of Zen. The I’s look like they could be spacers too so then it reads like a totally different poem.Love it.
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Thank you, Paul. It’s not as hardcore as some of them…but it worked for me.
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Oh, I share your pain! This is, however, devilishly clever!
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love this
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I think grammar or no grammar this make perfect sense… to me no grammar is however better than poor grammar…
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I be and then I don’t be. All of life is here.
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This be brilliant. This be strong. You be Poet. (Love it, Sarah!)
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Thank you, Jilly. Looking forward to lobbing some bricks. 😊
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Hooray!
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Well I be! This was meditative; mantra-like.
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U B Poet, listen to you be ! Everyone is going off on very creative bents tonight; so cool.
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Hmm. It didn’t feel very cool. I looked at the prompt initially and thought “no way”. Maybe it’s good for me to suffer for my art!!
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Wonderful, Sarah! You’ve expressed so well how I feel much of the time!
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Thanks, Kim. It was a struggle to let go…!
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This feels like a published poem — one studied in classrooms alongside the other greats.
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This was really smart. I covered up the I’s- and (like Paul said) and and got 2 for 1!
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always trying to give the best value possible!
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I be enigma I be reflection of all. Beautiful writing. 🙂
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Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate it.
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You’re welcome, Sarah. 🙂
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this be wonderful! loved how you used so few words and said so much
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Thank you! The spaces were important in this one.
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I be I be . . . amazed at your write here. This was a crazy challenge and some of the posts (LATE to the reading I am!) cause pause, and cause a second and third sip of strong black coffee to harness any sense…but this one. Well, as the old saying goes, “I’ll be!” 🙂 Enjoyed it very much…and the meanings are there within, under, and between the words. Well done!
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Thank you, Lillian. I couldn’t let sense go. It isn’t in me…
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Loved this….kind of mindfulness and the true sense of life….
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This is a powerful poem Sarah…says it all.
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Well I be!! This is such a solid meaningful piece sans grammar. Love it!
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